I know there are probably some grammar mistakes. I am working on those also but right now I am just curious about how the chapter reads. Anyone have any opinions I would gladly love to hear them.
CHAPTER 2
Dosteria spent her days
doing the same thing every day, never changing. She held the boundaries, the
walls, the prisons, all called different depending on who was doing the
talking. On most days, it was a rather boring job but someone had to do it and
for her it was a blessing. Dosteria, still after all this time, she was still
known as a lowly holder demon. With her non-born demon status she could only go
so many places, do so many jobs without the abilities of born breed demons.
As a holder demon her job was to protect, the souls that
Soul Catchers would bring down, occasionally she would attain a free spirit.
One who did not belong anywhere, that spent all their mortal life out of the
way of certain paths and yet a Soul Catcher bounded them. Dosteria found no
need to be a Soul Catcher but occasionally she wished she could find herself
somewhere else in the underworld.
Still as a holder demon, she made quite a name for
herself. Most learned not to cross paths with her and the ones stupid enough to
do so would up giving Zerius more work to do. She constantly was on his not
happy list most months but always did something to warm him over, well the best
anyone could. Zerius was an interesting demon to say the least. He became the
high power three centuries prior after a little hiccup. He was never supposed
to end up in the underworld but let’s just say he made nice with a woman of
power in the upper worlds and her power decided that he needed to play
underground for a while. Eventually people stopped talking about it and he
never went back.
Dosteria found her way in front of Zerius two centuries
later and he gave her a chance when no one else will. His choice of allowing
her to become a demon caused an uproar among others, brought light many
questions and when no answers were received, a good portion of the demons
thought less of her. Did not think she had it in her to be a demon, at least
not a powerful one.
Since then she has only had to deal with the stupid ones,
most do not cross her anymore though she cannot be sure they respect her
either. Zerius always commented on her aggression and temperament, perhaps that
is why she was still just a holder demon, rarely anyone to piss off, or kill
off in some cases.
While being a holder demon left her alone quite often,
she was able to practice her skills without worrying about harming others. When
the Soul Catchers come around they bring the most interesting tales if they
have the time to tell them, sometimes it is weeks between visits. There are
other holder demons, so only the ones that do not mind her, come her way unless
others are directed.
“I’ve got another one for you.” A voice teased her from
the hallway, turning quickly to see him, but the shadows hid him still, but she
did not need to see the face to know whom it was. She has heard his voice a
million times if not more. Still she was always surprised to actually see Dennon.
She tilted her head to the side, “Already?” Her question
was answered as he stepped into the light, pulling a blue ball of energy behind
him. His soul catching ability mesmerized her more than once. Always so quick
to find, capture, and bring to her, she always got his catches.
“Yes, already, it’s been weeks.” He shook his head as he answered.
“Weeks not possible.” Darting her eyes away from him
quickly, she realized what she said. A confession to him and she was already
screwed.
“Yes, possible. Dosteria you are spending too much time
down here.” He shook his head, standing outside one of the cages. She changed
the vibration of the wall as Dennon released the blue energy into the cellblock.
“You have got to take a break, Dosteria, being down here alone without anything
to signify passing of time.”
“And do what. Sit down and play with myself?” She asked
with a bit of bite behind her words. It was all joking.
“If that’s what you must do, sure.” The smile on his face
was one she was all to familiar with. “Zerius, will give you something else to
do for a few weeks.” He spoke but then under his breath, “holder demons always
allow themselves to go mad.”
‘Thanks for the input. Now tell me of your tales with
this one.” A quick change in subject is exactly what she needed.
I know there are some mistakes. I am just trying to see the overall feel of it. How does it read? Any input is wonderful. Thanks so much.
